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A Field Mouse in Your Care by ~ottersandsky:iconottersandsky:



I love your distance,
and the spite of time which
promises you to me

your low voice, a barn owl
and my little heart at one-seventy
in your claws –
you save me,
we save

all the currency for
later, the only
modern frugal kids

but God, those coins
burn holes in our pockets don’t they
sometimes love.

There are low, sinuous promises  
of mythological sin;

a snake laughs in the grass,
pistol-writhing and
opening its hell teeth

til I hear you crush its head with
the edge of a shovel,

and you are shouting beautiful names
we have never heard.

A baby artichoke heart
presses into my womb – it is the
personification

of our touching foreheads,
held knees and
swallowed seawater,

how you pull lunar strings
and get us out of the rip.

We have a black earthy garden
it slithers with green and tendrils,
the soil’s tomato breasts,
cupped palms

words are consuming us,
and you say to me when we are
lying there

that when I smile and the sun
falls naked through the
atmosphere,

these things are only
seemingly unconnected.
©2009 ~ottersandsky
:iconottersandsky:

Author's Comments

For whoever you are, out there, my lover.

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:iconalacrityjones:
I love how this is spans time. How it starts now, knowing that your lover is coming. And the time of which you're single that haves you know that you will meet the One. Because the doubts come when you aren't single. I especially like the imagery of your love coming in to swoop you - helpless to stop it - up.

I think i like these lines best:

'a snake laughs in the grass,
pistol-writhing and
opening its hell teeth

til I hear you crush its head with
the edge of a shovel,'


The thought of your love squashing out any and all 'snakes', because they ridicule, harm you is touching.

Blatant sexual imagery, you just had to didn't you? :P

I'm left to wonder if you meant to connect this;
'how you pull lunar strings
and get us out of the rip.'

With this;
'these things are only
seemingly unconnected'


Sorry for the less-than-extensive write-up. Anyway, this is definitely a poem to keep for the future. I love it.
:iconshackell:
This is wonderful.

"these things are only
seemingly unconnected."

And yet at the molecular level
we never truly touch.

We need more beautiful names.

--
Brecht- Because things are the way they are, things will not stay the way they are
Fallout 2 - Destruction of the Enclave erased all trace of President Richardson from history. Now the title of President is used simply as a bogeyman to frighten children
:iconottersandsky:
Thank you.

At the spiritual level, we don't just touch, we melt together.
:iconr-mitchell:
it feels like you're talking to the future... maybe to a place or a person or a feeling or a choice, or all those things...

combined bliss and contentment and peace and uncertainty and excitement. all the best feelings.
:iconpanda-vision:
Killer closing phrase :nod:
:iconoldest-boy:
holy shit; this describes (in detail) all too well; a situation in my life.

you are a channel for the drifting brilliance in the everywhere-air.

--
'SHARKS DON'T SLEEP' a collection of poems by Eric Hamilton.
:icontwistedalyx:
your low voice, a barn owl
and my little heart at one-seventy
in your claws –

There are low, sinuous promises
of mythological sin;

a snake laughs in the grass,
pistol-writhing and
opening its hell teeth

til I hear you crush its head with
the edge of a shovel,

and you are shouting beautiful names
we have never heard.


it is the
personification

of our touching foreheads,
held knees and
swallowed seawater,

how you pull lunar strings
and get us out of the rip.

We have a black earthy garden
it slithers with green and tendrils,
the soil’s tomato breasts,
cupped palms


(So, once again, I found almot all of it particularly striking, ha.)

--
[insert something witty here]
:iconamaranthones:
Oh Katie. This poem. Feels like parts of me.

I love that you say for your lover.

My pumps are malfunctioning with it.
:iconottersandsky:
Thank you. I knew you'd like it. :)

Pumps... plural?

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